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Post by glon on May 4, 2009 15:30:55 GMT -5
Age: 23 Gender: Male Profession: swords man Appearance: Hazel eyes with long blond hair not really strong looking but can be surprising wears red tunic with trousers underneath and bronze breastplate, bracers and greaves all with odd spirally patterns on. Wields a steel short sword and iron buckler. his skin is quite tanned which makes him look bit like an outsider at frist glance with his eyes. Personality: prefers not to kill but will if his king is threatened. he has been in to many wars and really smiles. when training new swordmen he barly ever show any sigh they doing well. he offen dosent get on with his co-workers and can be very Arrogant History: was found in a box near castle redmont. he got into lots of fight while growing up in a ward. notice for his talent early on in battleschool as a quick duler. Additional Information: He has always been afraid of large body’s of water and is very sea sick. he is very friendly with horse of all types and will neather harm an animal without good reason
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Post by Brandwyn on May 4, 2009 18:13:39 GMT -5
Welcome to Halt's Playground, Glon.
We hope that you have a great time here. We have a couple of questions and suggestions about your character. We thank you for taking a moment to address them.
By 'scard of the sea' I assume you mean he is afraid of the sea? (having meant to type 'scared' rather than 'scard', right?)
You have a nice character here to develop, but to make it easier for you to roleplay, could you please fill out a bit more on his personality. Take a look at some of the other characters to get an idea of what people put down in this category. You can mention things like "he is fun-loving" or "he rarely smiles" or "he is very reserved and keeps to himself" Things like that. Filling out this area in a bit more detail will help you to role play him better and will help the other players role play with you.
Also, please try to write in complete sentances and use periods, question marks, exclaimation points, commas and other puncutation as appropriate. There is a spell checker on this site if you use the expanded reply box. (To get to the expanded box you have to click on the word "reply" at the bottom of the last post on the thread you wish to post in. You will get a box that comes up with smiley faces and the combat dice roll and the spell checker. You can also preview your post to read it over before actually posting it from this box. It is much better than using the quick reply box.)
I am offering this information in the hope that it will help you, not to discourage you from playing. So please don't be offended.
Thank you for taking a moment to expand your character and Welcome to Halt's Playground! Brandy (global moderator)
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Post by glon on May 5, 2009 10:22:25 GMT -5
thanks for your coments
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Post by Brandwyn on May 5, 2009 14:25:25 GMT -5
That's a bit better, but still a little light on the details. However if you feel confident you can roleplay him, then he is accepted.
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